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#1 Swagg

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Posted 22 November 2013 - 01:40 AM

Stop sitting in the dirt coughing,

cos’ if its happened to you once then its happened too often.

A bible and the shirt thats on your back,

some smelly jeans, a lighter and a pipe for smoking crack 

is all you got in this - piece - of - shit - world where people live 

there whole entire lives to make some profit off of other people

who have lost it - somewhere down the line - its dog eat dog 

and its dogma to the kind of people like you who just wanna live 

and thats it - its easy to achieve nirvana without meditating 

just start self medicating with a fat spliff,

listen to some classic hits on absolute and make

that kinda shit a habit the facts and proof are in the 

Kool Aid so hurry up and drink it, 

918 souls saved if they could think with, 

there own brains -

I digress - if you really want the key to happiness 

then send 12 installments of $29.99 to this address 

we don’t mind if its in the form cash or cheque 

HECK if you prefer we are now accepting souls, 

assholes or playboy playmate of the year centerfolds.

HELL we’ll even throw in a George Forman Grill 

if you join right now, C’mon you know its a steal! 

The best deal you’ll make for eternity.

Trust me, Bob from finance subscribed months ago

and he’s never looked happier on the outside,

don’t worry about internally, 

and anyone can sign up! Blacks, browns, jews, whites.

Cos’ you all look the same in the pale moon light.  

 

The first time i manage to finish one without getting sidetracked or going off topic half way through.

There are some references some people might not get or w/e i dunno. 

I didnt know what else to do with it so yeah

 

would appreciate feedback 


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#2 SWAGTART

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Posted 22 November 2013 - 02:09 AM

I didn't get the references
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#3 Jack

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Posted 22 November 2013 - 02:19 PM

better than zebrakill's


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#4 I Love Odd Future99

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Posted 22 November 2013 - 11:04 PM

WTF :mellow:  


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Posted 22 November 2013 - 11:19 PM

Looks more like a rap than a poem.


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Posted 22 November 2013 - 11:59 PM

K.


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Posted 23 November 2013 - 12:20 AM

 the concept was like a commercial from the devil to get you to sell your soul in exchange for "happiness"


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Posted 23 November 2013 - 04:09 AM

 the concept was like a commercial from the devil to get you to sell your soul in exchange for "happiness"

 

you are a cornball
 


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Posted 23 November 2013 - 04:27 AM

I didn't get the references

that kinda shit a habit the facts and proof are in the
Kool Aid so hurry up and drink it,
918 souls saved if they could think with,
there own brains -

^^ that's a reference to the Jonestown massacre, where People's Temple cult leader Jim Jones ordered his followers to drink cyanide laced Kool Aid, and so 918 people died from this.

It would've been prevented if they could think for themselves.
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#10 Swagg

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Posted 25 November 2013 - 02:01 AM

you are a cornball
 

what is cornball please 


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